So, here I am, still starving, but I've put the plays on hold for a while so I can finish a novel (and prove I can do it.) It's on its 30,000th rewrite now (feels like it anyhow!) But things are looking as if they are going well with this write. I have figured out why I was unhappy with it.
When I've done about ten chapters (that is, enough to know it's working this time) I'll post it, chapter by chapter on critique.circle.com. I will post the first page here. Comments appreciated.